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My periodic little freestyle thing... I think theres like 12 of these "Bottled water on papers" rollin' around... Anyway, check it
Yo,
Decorated Veteran, I Been To WAR-AND-CAME-THROUGH, I'm 'Out Of Reach To You Children', I Come With A 'WARNIN'-LABEL',This Is A Personal-Threat, The BEST-GET-EATEN-FAST,-I'LL-SAY-FOR-CERTAIN,Battlin' Me? You're 'Flirtin'-With-Death', Like A 'NECROPHILIAC-DATING-SERVICE'!!..!!
Grisly Battle Scenes, Tattered Dreams, FLESH-LIE-GORY, Decayed Remains, And The REST-TRIED-POORLY, That's My Battle-Record, Ask-To-Check-In, Get Ya DEAD-GUY-GLORY...As Far As Straight Ridah? He Talk Shit...But When Asked To Battle, He 'Tucked His Tail In' And Read A 'BED-TIME-STORY'!!..!!
A Black Mamba, POISED-IN, Nigga I'm POISIN,'I'm Ahead Of You, Brotha',I'm Your 'CONJOINED-TWIN', BOY-QUIT!! You Know You Can't SPIT-THESE-VERSES, I'm SICK,-THE-NURSES Told Me KID,-YOU'RE-PERFECT, Is It Worth-It? Wastin' Time, Sprayin' Rhymes? SHIT,-IT'S-CERTAIN, Cause I'm 'Ridin' This Board For All It's Worth' Like The 'SILVER-SURFER'!!..!!
I'm BURYIN'-CLOWNS,-IT'S-D-DAY, You Facin' Jason, 'Acts In My Hand',I'm 'CARRYIN'-'ROUND-A-SCREENPLAY', EAT-LAMES, They're WEAK-FRAMES, Get BENT-FOR-STARTERS,I'm SPITTIN-ARSON, But If Ya BITCH-IS-HOTTER , I'll 'Run A Train Through Ya House' Like 'MISTER-ROGERS'!!..!!
The Dopest-Hero, Ya Flow-Is-Zero, I'm The Best? RIGHT-ANSWER,Shoulda Been An 'English Teacher', I Got 'NICE-GRAMMAR', Sick-As-Fuck, Ill-Enough,'Direct you to your Death','LIGHTS-CAMERA',Provin' You Don't Gotta 'Go-Through-Chemo', To 'FIGHT-CANCER'!!..!!
I'll Never Reach My Prime, I'm Always Expandin', Saw The Edge Of The Universe, Hauled Ass,&Passed It, Neutron Star Crystals Got Lodged In My Plasm, I Said Fuck It, Battled Infinity, And Outlasted. You Can Not Fathom What I've Come To Grasp-In, Rappin Is A Hobby, The Universe Is My Passion!!..!!
I Walk In Two Planes Of Existance, Jet Lag In My System, Life On Auto Pilot, Sways In The Instance, Listen, I Don't Come In A Box, But You Could Say That I'm Gifted, Because I Can Hear A Calm Breeze And Relay What I'm Hearin'. Yep, Wisdom Is Light, Not Really, It's Brain-Phonics, But Either Way, It Got Me Wonderin' Why Every Equation Got My Name-On-It,X!!..!!
I like it overall, there were parts that stood out above the rest. Bars 2 and 7 are the ones I liked the most.
This is the dopest line I've seen from you lately for this reason, the flow, multies, complexity and continuation of a single theme is top notch:
"Grisly Battle Scenes, Tattered
Dreams, FLESH-LIE-GORY, Decayed Remains, And The REST-TRIED-POORLY,
That's My Battle-Record, Ask-To-Check-In, Get Ya DEAD-GUY-GLORY...As Far
As Straight Ridah? He Talk Shit...But When Asked To Battle, He 'Tucked
His Tail In' And Read A 'BED-TIME-STORY'!!..!!"
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Posted: 25 July 2010 at 2:38pm | IP Logged
This is the first thing I've ever read of yours (I'm knew to the boards here as you can see).. great stuff though. Thought the Mr. Rogers line was the best. Hope to see more like this in the future.
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Posted: 25 July 2010 at 4:55pm | IP Logged
Nice Read overall...
FAV LINE:
I'm BURYIN'-CLOWNS,-IT'S-D-DAY, You Facin' Jason, 'Acts In
My Hand',I'm 'CARRYIN'-'ROUND-A-SCREENPLAY', EAT-
LAMES, They're WEAK-FRAMES, Get BENT-FOR-STARTERS,I'm
SPITTIN-ARSON, But If Ya BITCH-IS-HOTTER , I'll 'Run A
Train Through Ya House' Like 'MISTER-ROGERS'!!..!!
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Posted: 28 July 2010 at 4:09pm | IP Logged
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Nice Read overall...
FAV LINE:
I'm BURYIN'-CLOWNS,-IT'S-D-DAY, You Facin' Jason, 'Acts In My Hand',I'm 'CARRYIN'-'ROUND-A-SCREENPLAY', EAT- LAMES, They're WEAK-FRAMES, Get BENT-FOR-STARTERS,I'm SPITTIN-ARSON, But If Ya BITCH-IS-HOTTER , I'll 'Run A Train Through Ya House' Like 'MISTER-ROGERS'!!..!!
RATED!
^^ That's everything I was going to say, like word for word down to the bold "RATED"...only difference is it would've had my squiggly star squiggly with the rated instead of the exclaimation point...One suggestion would be to use more colors next time though, I want to feel like I just jumped into the Chuck E Cheese play pen wearing all tye dye while opening a pack of skittles when I read a verse, but yeah, good read!
~*~RATED~*~
^see?
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Posted: 18 August 2010 at 12:02am | IP Logged
I rated it a 5, i see some people said, it was so-so, naw dawg in my eyes you had a descent drop, with multies to have a nice flow and punches that structure ya entire drop perfectly.
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Topic: Bottled Water On Paper 2010
Checkmate!
